Haiku Baiku

knee tunes · Post by **knee tunes** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:23 am

I dug a coo noo
until there was digestion
of all I used to

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:26 am

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:45 am

I know the whole 5, 7, 5, thing but I usually have trouble with the right kireji. So here goes:

Forum of the web
Together by band and music
Red Mosquito - kin

BurtReynolds · Post by **BurtReynolds** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:46 am

Sgt. Crackpot wrote:I know the whole 5, 7, 5, thing but I usually have trouble with the right kireji. So here goes:

Forum of the web
Together by band and music
Red Mosquito - kin

Its really more of a guideline.

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:48 am

BurtReynolds wrote:Its really more of a guideline.

Which part? The 5,7,5 thing or the kireji?

BurtReynolds · Post by **BurtReynolds** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:50 am

Sgt. Crackpot wrote:
BurtReynolds wrote:Its really more of a guideline.
Which part? The 5,7,5 thing or the kireji?

the 5,7,5 thing. Maybe both.

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:53 am

BurtReynolds wrote:
Sgt. Crackpot wrote:
BurtReynolds wrote:Its really more of a guideline.
Which part? The 5,7,5 thing or the kireji?
the 5,7,5 thing. Maybe both.

OK, thanks. I guess I just like it more if it fits perfectly, without detracting from the thought/message that's intended, it's probably an anal retentiveness thing. But it's good to know that there's some flexibility.

knee tunes · Post by **knee tunes** » Fri August 02, 2013 6:01 am

if its about deer
or anything in nature
the gods will pat ass

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 6:02 am

knee tunes wrote:if its about deer
or anything in nature
the gods will pat ass

I love the twist at the end.

Norah · Post by **Norah** » Fri August 02, 2013 7:14 am

street lights on the glass
cascading out forever
what's on the menu?

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 7:54 am

No need compromise
Harmony in the marriage
Half and half pizza

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 8:45 am

Agony of hell
Cut too close with rusty blade
Ingrown pubic hair

harmless · Post by **harmless** » Fri August 02, 2013 8:55 am

5,7,5 was invented for English haiku as it was thought to approximate Japanese syllable lengths. But it turns out they are so variable, and generally much longer, that there's a lot of debate about it and quite a bit of flexibility; I know a lot of translated haiku isn't in 5,7,5. Some poets think 3,4,3 would be more accurate, technically.

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Fri August 02, 2013 10:30 am

Poet and scholar
Expert on percussion all
Awesome our Harmless

Norah · Post by **Norah** » Fri August 02, 2013 5:19 pm

rolling down the street
smoking indo, sipping on
gin and juice. laid back.

washing machine · Post by **washing machine** » Fri August 02, 2013 6:33 pm

Banana leaves wave
Graffiti guys spray our names
Life in the jungle

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Sat August 03, 2013 7:35 am

Money greedy all
Rob me take all I have plus more
Fuck you auto shops

Post by **Sgt. Crackpot** » Mon August 05, 2013 11:12 am

We begin again
Never welcomed, always loathed
Fuck yourself Monday

knee tunes · Post by **knee tunes** » Tue August 06, 2013 3:58 pm

surface the north wrote:Banana leaves wave
Graffiti guys spray our names
Life in the jungle

Norah · Post by **Norah** » Tue August 06, 2013 6:15 pm

I surfaced the north
when my pen wasn't writing.
I'm in hiding, yeah.

Red Mosquito

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