Song of the Moment: Dead Man
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Song of the Moment: Dead Man
I Am No Guide - Pearl Jam Song by Song - Out now!
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Such a good song. I love the vibe of this and Eddie's vocals.
I don't like the repetition of 'mocking me' though....feels like it should have some rhyme there
I don't like the repetition of 'mocking me' though....feels like it should have some rhyme there
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That would take away from the mocking aspect of the lyric if it was just a rhyme, tho.
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I don't think that lyric sounds good. The second one can stay. The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
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socking me
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focking me
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Then it wouldn't be mocking.mikejasond wrote:I don't think that lyric sounds good. The second one can stay. The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
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I don't think repeating the word mocking is necessary to create a 'mocking' tone or whatever it apparently is doingwease wrote:Then it wouldn't be mocking.mikejasond wrote:I don't think that lyric sounds good. The second one can stay. The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
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Jesus Christ, this has become absurd.
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I said I love the song I just had one criticism!
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mikejasond wrote:The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
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The hallways are all rocking me.
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It doesn't have to be hallways. It can be something else. I just think the mocking line will have more punch as a rhyme.
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The ladies they're all rocking me?
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Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
I just don't like the repeated 'mocking me' where it sounds like there should be a rhyme. Otherwise the song is amazing.