Red Mosquito

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

Syllables. He meant syllables.

scrub12 wrote:

evenslow wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

I think saying “took her way too soon” instead of “away too soon” may be slightly better though.

welcome to the nitpick olympics.

Instead of saying Superblood Wolfmoon, I hope he just goes SBWM live.

the whole song should be la da da.

evenslow wrote: the whole song should be la da da.

A true return to form

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

Syllables. He meant syllables.

Well the first one is still the same amount of syllables either way so we’re splitting atoms here.

They really should have focused the whole song around the la da da part

scrub12 wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

Syllables. He meant syllables.

Well the first one is still the same amount of syllables either way so we’re splitting atoms here.

Wait, "she was taken too soon" and "I lost her too soon" are the same amount of syllables?
I've been saying a few words wrong all my life then.

evenslow wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

evenslow wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

I think saying “took her way too soon” instead of “away too soon” may be slightly better though.

welcome to the nitpick olympics.

Instead of saying Superblood Wolfmoon, I hope he just goes SBWM live.

the whole song should be la da da.

SBWF Reprise as a hidden track. La da da-only version.

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

Syllables. He meant syllables.

Well the first one is still the same amount of syllables either way so we’re splitting atoms here.

Wait, "she was taken too soon" and "I lost her too soon" are the same amount of syllables?
I've been saying a few words wrong all my life then.

Took her away too soon and she was taken too soon are the same amount of syllables.

guitar_davey wrote:

McParadigm wrote:

guitar_davey wrote:

McParadigm wrote:

DeeDee wrote:

Birds in Hell wrote:I have to imagine this song will go the same way as Getaway. They’ll attempt playing it a few times, Ed will throw his head around like he’s really into it, all the while Stone and Jeff will share knowing grimaces as the song is at heart a formless chug without any genuine movement or excitement and it quietly and ignobly disappears from setlists shortly after, never (or very rarely) to return.

Getaway is sooo much better than SW.

This take mesmerizes me. Getaway sounds tepid, lifeless, and forced. Whatever you think of the songwriting in this song, the band at least sounds like THEY think they’re killing it.

Getaway is redeemed, just barely, because of Jeff.

He plays the vocal melody? Also, what?

Well, technically yes, but on his bass.

lol

Lyrically, this is one of the laziest singles since the Fixer

scrub12 wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

Syllables. He meant syllables.

Well the first one is still the same amount of syllables either way so we’re splitting atoms here.

Wait, "she was taken too soon" and "I lost her too soon" are the same amount of syllables?
I've been saying a few words wrong all my life then.

Took her away too soon and she was taken too soon are the same amount of syllables.

Yeah, I think the actual problem some people have with it is the meter. The syllables are fine.

He's not cramming too many words/syllables in, he's just forced to put emphasis on the wrong part of "away", which makes it sound awkward. You would have the same awkwardness with "I lost her too soon" because it doesn't fit properly. "She was taken too soon" fits in perfectly, but I don't know that it would actually sound any better. I don't mind the odd bit of awkwardness like this in a fun song.

If anything, I would've added one more "La da da" section right before "She was a stunner" (and I probably will when I get a chance).
Then again, I don't make better music, nor better music decisions than these guys, so another turd in the wind I guess.

The song is fine you bunch of sourpusses

Solid 4 star song. The rest of you are wrong.

Farmer John wrote:As far as the structure, I'm calling the "Superblood Wolfmoon took her away too soon" parts the chorus. The solo section is the bridge. Not sure what to call the "la la la" part since it's kind of like the chorus but without the lyrics.

The rest is all verses the keep building into different parts.

Why do people think the part that repeats twice is the chorus and not the part that repeats four times and ends the song?

McParadigm wrote:

DeeDee wrote:

Birds in Hell wrote:I have to imagine this song will go the same way as Getaway. They’ll attempt playing it a few times, Ed will throw his head around like he’s really into it, all the while Stone and Jeff will share knowing grimaces as the song is at heart a formless chug without any genuine movement or excitement and it quietly and ignobly disappears from setlists shortly after, never (or very rarely) to return.

Getaway is sooo much better than SW.

This take mesmerizes me. Getaway sounds tepid, lifeless, and forced. Whatever you think of the songwriting in this song, the band at least sounds like THEY think they’re killing it.

I have my reservations about "Superblood Wolfmoon" but I'll take it over "Getaway" eight days a week. "Superblood," for me, is nowhere near the worst of "LB."

mikejasond wrote:

Farmer John wrote:As far as the structure, I'm calling the "Superblood Wolfmoon took her away too soon" parts the chorus. The solo section is the bridge. Not sure what to call the "la la la" part since it's kind of like the chorus but without the lyrics.

The rest is all verses the keep building into different parts.

Why do people think the part that repeats twice is the chorus and not the part that repeats four times and ends the song?

It doesn't matter except for people knowing what you mean if you say "I like the chorus".

I like how it's hard to agree which part of the song is what.

Lmao at the people saying Eddie should be using less syalbles. Don't give up the day jobs folks.

Buby wrote:If anything, I would've added one more "La da da" section right before "She was a stunner" (and I probably will when I get a chance).
Then again, I don't make better music, nor better music decisions than these guys, so another turd in the wind I guess.

The song is fine you bunch of sourpusses

part of me would like another la la la section too

lecherouslittlestump wrote:Lmao at the people saying Eddie should be using less syalbles. Don't give up the day jobs folks.

fewer*

philpritchard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:

scrub12 wrote:

Bi_3 wrote:One thing that bothers me about this one is Ed's insistence of cramming words into the music. Changing it to "she was taken too soon" or "I lost her too soon" in the chorus would make it flow and sound so much smoother while maintaining the intent.

Neither of those sound better to me. Also, they’re the same amount of words...

Syllables. He meant syllables.

Well the first one is still the same amount of syllables either way so we’re splitting atoms here.

Wait, "she was taken too soon" and "I lost her too soon" are the same amount of syllables?
I've been saying a few words wrong all my life then.

Took her away too soon and she was taken too soon are the same amount of syllables.

Yeah, I think the actual problem some people have with it is the meter. The syllables are fine.

He's not cramming too many words/syllables in, he's just forced to put emphasis on the wrong part of "away", which makes it sound awkward. You would have the same awkwardness with "I lost her too soon" because it doesn't fit properly. "She was taken too soon" fits in perfectly, but I don't know that it would actually sound any better. I don't mind the odd bit of awkwardness like this in a fun song.

Shit, you are correct. When I hear things like that it just seems like lazy writing/singing. Ed seamlessly makes it work in Sleight, but that was pre-PRAMG Ed so...