Red Mosquito

Mine wrote: it's not going to be the versions we heard. If that happens hundreds of posts here about how they ruined them will follow.

Heathen wrote:

Mine wrote:Boring. This is definitely a demo. The arrangement is barely there the vocal take is essentially absent. It's a work in progress place holder instead of a proper vocal take.
I guess they never finished/ didn't know what to do with it. It sounds kind of like the gibberish singers do barely hinting at the melody and words when they aren't finished with the lyrics. I find it extremely repetitive.

I didn't have time to check it before but I've seen the comments here and honestly the demos didn't surprise me. I like this board because most of regular posters are well articulated in being critical about the band except when some shitty demo pops up then they turn into geniuses. There are things about this song that could be the basis of a passable song. The melody and vocal take need a lot of work and i'm not talking about he hurr-durr with severe sinusitis here. It needs to get interesting sooner than the outro. It needs an arrangement and possibly structural changes.
In my opinion not releasing those 2 songs wasn't a mistake and i wouldn't be surprised if the ever release them it's not going to be the versions we heard. If that happens hundreds of posts here about how they ruined them will follow.

ok brendan

elliseamos wrote:

southp wrote:I've been out of the loop since yesterday afternoon... what's the latest? Is everyone still creaming over CC or has reality set it yet?

i like it still. not sure if that answers your question, as i'm only one guy.

Mine wrote:Boring. This is definitely a demo. The arrangement is barely there the vocal take is essentially absent. It's a work in progress place holder instead of a proper vocal take.
I guess they never finished/ didn't know what to do with it. It sounds kind of like the gibberish singers do barely hinting at the melody and words when they aren't finished with the lyrics. I find it extremely repetitive. ....

Release_Me wrote:Reattempt!

Cold Confession Lyrics:

He scared himself, into a trance
took him down river, secretly
He floated out, into the ocean
of his worst dream, of his rough sea
of all the men he could trust
he was not one of them, always hurting himself
the scars unseen, the wounds untold
whatever time had healed, it still took hold
A life washed away, like words in the sand
and when the high tide came, so went his plan
a troubled past, a troubled future
a troubled weight leaning on a bar stool
one strobelight star, he finally saw
navigation towards a brand new course
but to himself the memory clear
cold confession only, that only he could hear

He let himself scream, he let himself cry
let himself reach the other side
there was no christ, there was no cross
just forgiveness, allowed himself
accepted the past, then set it free
oh and it ran off like an animal released
he holds the proof, he holds their star
in his pure arms, in his clear heart
He's safe now, he's back in her breast
he saw his path, and changed it, chased it, at last

Lounge Lizard wrote:Beautiful song, wonderful words. Now sing it in lower key and its fine with me

southp wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:Beautiful song, wonderful words. Now sing it in lower key and its fine with me

... and add a proper melody!

Thejambi wrote:

southp wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:Beautiful song, wonderful words. Now sing it in lower key and its fine with me

... and add a proper melody!

Negative to both.

southp wrote:

Lounge Lizard wrote:Beautiful song, wonderful words. Now sing it in lower key and its fine with me

... and add a proper melody!

LooseGroove927 wrote:Not sure if anyone else has posted this, but this is one of the few times that Boom really adds something to a Pearl Jam song. The organ is really simple, but it adds some really cool atmosphere to the song.

philpritchard wrote:

Release_Me wrote:Reattempt!

Cold Confession Lyrics:

He scared himself, into a trance
took him down river, secretly
He floated out, into the ocean
of his worst dream, of his rough sea
of all the men he could trust
he was not one of them, always hurting himself
the scars unseen, the wounds untold
whatever time had healed, it still took hold
A life washed away, like words in the sand
and when the high tide came, so went his plan
a troubled past, a troubled future
a troubled weight leaning on a bar stool
one strobelight star, he finally saw
navigation towards a brand new course
but to himself the memory clear
cold confession only, that only he could hear

He let himself scream, he let himself cry
let himself reach the other side
there was no christ, there was no cross
just forgiveness, allowed himself
accepted the past, then set it free
oh and it ran off like an animal released
he holds the proof, he holds their star
in his pure arms, in his clear heart
He's safe now, he's back in her breast
he saw his path, and changed it, chased it, at last

That's pretty much what I get out of it, and it's awesome. The only potential change I can think of is "Navigation towards a brand new coast", but it might just be because I like it that way. I don't know if I actually hear it that way, and I can't listen right now... but it fits with the rest of the song.

Heathen wrote:

Mine wrote:Boring. This is definitely a demo. The arrangement is barely there the vocal take is essentially absent. It's a work in progress place holder instead of a proper vocal take.
I guess they never finished/ didn't know what to do with it. It sounds kind of like the gibberish singers do barely hinting at the melody and words when they aren't finished with the lyrics. I find it extremely repetitive.

I didn't have time to check it before but I've seen the comments here and honestly the demos didn't surprise me. I like this board because most of regular posters are well articulated in being critical about the band except when some shitty demo pops up then they turn into geniuses. There are things about this song that could be the basis of a passable song. The melody and vocal take need a lot of work and i'm not talking about he hurr-durr with severe sinusitis here. It needs to get interesting sooner than the outro. It needs an arrangement and possibly structural changes.
In my opinion not releasing those 2 songs wasn't a mistake and i wouldn't be surprised if the ever release them it's not going to be the versions we heard. If that happens hundreds of posts here about how they ruined them will follow.

ok brendan

Mine wrote:Boring. This is definitely a demo. The arrangement is barely there the vocal take is essentially absent. It's a work in progress place holder instead of a proper vocal take.
I guess they never finished/ didn't know what to do with it.