Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Fri December 28, 2012 5:49 pm
Such a good song. I love the vibe of this and Eddie's vocals.
I don't like the repetition of 'mocking me' though....feels like it should have some rhyme there
Red Mosquito
Song of the Moment: Dead Man
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Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:29 pm
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:38 pm
That would take away from the mocking aspect of the lyric if it was just a rhyme, tho.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:41 pm
I don't think that lyric sounds good. The second one can stay. The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:41 pm
socking me
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:42 pm
focking me
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:43 pm
Then it wouldn't be mocking.mikejasond wrote:I don't think that lyric sounds good. The second one can stay. The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 5:45 pm
I don't think repeating the word mocking is necessary to create a 'mocking' tone or whatever it apparently is doingwease wrote:Then it wouldn't be mocking.mikejasond wrote:I don't think that lyric sounds good. The second one can stay. The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:20 pm
cocking me
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:51 pm
Jesus Christ, this has become absurd.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:53 pm
I said I love the song I just had one criticism!
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:53 pm
mikejasond wrote:The first can maybe be 'knocking me' or 'rocking me' or something.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:54 pm
The hallways are all rocking me.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:56 pm
It doesn't have to be hallways. It can be something else. I just think the mocking line will have more punch as a rhyme.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:56 pm
The ladies they're all rocking me?
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 7:57 pm
Fuck my brain.
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 10:12 pm
what happened here
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 10:15 pm
this can't be real
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 10:18 pm
mjd
Re: Song of the Moment: Dead Man
Posted: Wed May 18, 2016 10:19 pm
I just don't like the repeated 'mocking me' where it sounds like there should be a rhyme. Otherwise the song is amazing.